jev3: @cupcakes Appreciate the input! Glad you liked the bits about Applebloom and Daisy Cream. I was worried I might have been trying too hard with that. --I'll see what I can do about formatting, it was much more readable in its original document version. --Thanks for the OoC alert for Twilight, I should be able to fix that easily enough. --Probably was kinda lazy with some of the transitions, might be able to tweak some of them. --The "show don't tell stuff" I'll just keep in mind for when I do the next part. --As for the theme song, since the tone is supposed to get lighter later on, I'll hold onto it for a little while and see how it fits into later parts. If it still doesn't work I'll just replace it with a divider.