1.0 link Rainbow Dash Network http://rainbowdash.net/ Pony (pony) http://rainbowdash.net/pony http://rainbowdash.net/notice/1050368 @<span class="vcard"><a href="http://rainbowdash.net/user/6135" class="url" title="Forest Rain"><span class="fn nickname">forestrain</span></a></span> Thanks! I do love descriptive language. Yes, I was thinking the long paragraph could be a chorus. If it's not too much trouble, I'm thinking I may leave it to you to change it into a more song-worthy form somehow once I'm finished. As it is, I was thinking I'd write 4 more verses (doubling the length of the poem), and then repeat the chorus once more. Or (instead of 4 verses, chorus, 4 verses, chorus) I could do 3 verses, chorus, 3 verses, chorus, 3 verses, chorus. Do you have a preference? Also, where do you think I should try and incorporate the hook? I like the idea of working one in, I'm just not sure where it might fit best.