1.0 link Rainbow Dash Network http://rainbowdash.net/ Cyrus Duong (keyreaper) http://rainbowdash.net/keyreaper http://rainbowdash.net/notice/1097748 @<span class="vcard"><a href="http://rainbowdash.net/user/8277" class="url" title="Daniel Oates"><span class="fn nickname">doates</span></a></span> Just finished you're story if you're still on here. I'm writing up in the comments now. In short I think the story has great potential but was much to quick paced and wreckless. Too much was said and done in 6,000 words without enough detail. This would be a great story if a structure was well built up and chapters had been split up into sections of your revenge. Other than that, I enjoyed the idea of the alternate universe being in your hands to save it.