1.0 link Rainbow Dash Network http://rainbowdash.net/ Crusader 8 (princelypublictimeline) http://rainbowdash.net/princelypublictimeline http://rainbowdash.net/notice/1304383 @<span class="vcard"><a href="http://rainbowdash.net/user/9751" class="url" title="Samuel"><span class="fn nickname">dlcentaur</span></a></span> no no I meant just the overall excessive amount of reasons he had to be depressed and anguished. Typically a character should only have one or two traumas that, when mixed with the circumstances of the character or perhaps his or her choices, create the tragic heartstring-pulling mood. But when it's just an unbelievable train wreck to the point when you can almost laugh at its absurdity, THAT's when it's a bit too much. I think what worked best for the story is that although it was fiction he wrote it in the pretense of being nonfiction. That ultimately created a successful immersion for my reading experience.