1.0 link Rainbow Dash Network http://rainbowdash.net/ adiwan (adiwan) http://rainbowdash.net/adiwan http://rainbowdash.net/notice/3140729 <span class="spbar" style="color:#000;background-color:#000;">@<span class="vcard"><a href="http://rainbowdash.net/user/798" class="url" title="RedEnchilada"><span class="fn nickname mention">redenchilada</span></a></span> #<span class="tag"><a href="http://rainbowdash.net/tag/spoiler" rel="tag">spoiler</a></span> You are right. There are a lot of things I would cut away. There was also no reason why the party has to split up. There was unnecessary conflict. Also I would have included Discord into the story such that he is forced to help them. Why wouldn't Twilight not want help from an omnipotent being like Discord? Heck, I wouldn't mind if Discord would do havoc again while trying to &quot;help&quot; them. The zebra drug flashback was kinda neat but that could have been written differently. If Celestia have told the story it would feel more natural than what the writers did here.</span>