1.0 link Rainbow Dash Network http://rainbowdash.net/ Sir E. Hooves III (eaglehooves) http://rainbowdash.net/eaglehooves http://rainbowdash.net/notice/652450 @<span class="vcard"><a href="http://rainbowdash.net/user/4737" class="url" title="Joseph Sarrows"><span class="fn nickname">raiderjoseph</span></a></span> Action isn't what I said the issue was. It's the fact that your characters go completely Mary Sue with their powers. While not completely applicable to ponies (There's one that any pony with a cutie mark gets a point for), here's a decent guide to when you may need to dial it back. <a href="http://www.ponylandpress.com/ms-test.html" title="http://www.ponylandpress.com/ms-test.html" rel="nofollow external">http://www.ponylandpress.com/ms-test.html</a> I'm more of a [comedy] than [adventure] pony myself, but Alicorns are a bit of a red flag for all genres. They can be written well, but even good authors seem to struggle with them at times.