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@madflavors @asvendius Don't forget to throw me some feedback once you finish reading chapter 4. I want to make sure I'm still doing a good job.
Wednesday, 23-Nov-11 16:20:37 UTC from web-
@tenmihara I just finished reading the chapter a little while ago. When I tried reading it before I had some interuptions. Other than a handful of typos it is great. Typos I probably should of taken a note of so you could fix them... I am not a helpful pony...
Thursday, 24-Nov-11 06:07:17 UTC from web-
@asvendius I would have appreciated that; my normal beta-reader for spelling and grammar hasn't been present in a while. I think her computer's busted
Thursday, 24-Nov-11 06:08:59 UTC from web-
@tenmihara Well I'll be sure to take note of any I see in the future and send a message your way.
Thursday, 24-Nov-11 06:12:03 UTC from web-
@asvendius Are there any specific points you'd like to mention? I'm curious as to how certain scenes might make readers feel
Thursday, 24-Nov-11 06:12:58 UTC from web-
@tenmihara Well I really liked the phoenix scene. Between that and the zombie scene it sort of developed Ditzy's character as a pony who thinks and acts fast, only realising the consequences in the aftermath, like in the end of chapter 39/beginning of chapter 40 of Kkat's story. One thing I definitely like about your story in general is compared to the other FoE stories it doesn't go into as much detail about the gore. That stuff was a bit of a deterrent for me when it came to the main story and Project Horizons.
Thursday, 24-Nov-11 06:26:27 UTC from web-
@asvendius I can live with that. For the record, that balefire phoenix was not Pyrelight XD I realize that too much gore can be off putting, so I put what's needed for impact and no more. I'm glad you like Ditzy's personification. One last thing; did you catch what May was doing when Ditzy left her at the hospital. If not, double check and let me know how it makes you feel
Thursday, 24-Nov-11 06:30:22 UTC from web-
@tenmihara Yeah, I noticed that. When she pulled out the inhaler I figured it was either a secret medical condition, or she was drugging up, and that question was answered shortly thereafter. Adds a good plot point, curious to see how Ditzy reacts when she realises what's going on.
Thursday, 24-Nov-11 06:40:35 UTC from web-
@asvendius Considering that she got to see most of Equestria Destroyed, and one of her best friends dead right in front of her, not to mention her own condition, she wanted a brief reprieve D= She knows the risks as a medical pony, but what she didn't account for was the diminished effect that Dash has on ghouls. This will inevitably lead to higher doses D=
Thursday, 24-Nov-11 06:45:19 UTC from web
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