Replies to redtie, page 26
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@redtie (gah) ...to impart, alas.
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@redtie Silent Nights and Evening Star were really theme-inspired; I've got another called Morning Dew later in the story. I think the best thing is to just mull it in the context of the story's theme, setting, etc. No secret formulas to
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@redtie That's a good thought. Yeah, show don't tell was one of the things I had in mind with the rewrite, but I still feel like there isn't enough happening in the dialogue scenes.
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@redtie No prob. And yeah, I do that for sure. I'm working on a significant rewrite of the first part and just about have the second part done so hopefully I'll have something to show in a couple weeks. Thanks for reading and giving feedback; I appreciate it.
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@redtie Might be neat to try
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@redtie Probably a good idea
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@redtie Definitely an improvement, but still relatively quiet (I blame your mic). For second I thought the tapping kind of sounded like a deck of cards being rapped against a card table =O
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@thatonepony @redtie You both put a decent amount of enthusiasm into Goldenblood for the Hoofington Rises speech, but I must say I like the tone @thatonepony put into the Dealer more. That attitude with a bit more dry rasp I think would be suitable
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@redtie the latter
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@thatonepony I was right about what I said to @redtie about dealer though; Blackjack specifically describes his voice as Dusty in chapter 21
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@redtie So I see. Well then, I shall await his demonstrations. I may not be perfect myself, but I know what I'm aiming for and can offer critiques as well as the next guy =D
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@redtie That would certainly help with our lack of diversity when it comes to female voices. @thatonepony Thanks for the tip on Twist; I shall try her with a touch of sarcasm/cynicism on the next run. Have you two sorted out Dealer, Sanguine, Goldenblood and Lighthooves yet?
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@redtie Probably too much work. Scorch does all the BLAMS himself too
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@redtie he can 'umm' as much as he wants; he's just trying to organize this thoughts. It's not like he has a script/story to read from XD
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@thatonepony @redtie You two still around?
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@redtie Yeah, that's more or less what I was thinking too.
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@redtie Satirical eh? hmm...
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@redtie I'm down, personally, though I think we do have some people who aren't of age.
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!vancouverbronies @redtie that would be perfect if the other Vancover Bronies dont mind spending the cash for meals. Hell if possible going to a nice bar or pub would be cool. (not sure if you're all old enough though)
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@redtie Yoink!
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@redtie At the moment, Blackjack's voice is just my regular speaking voice. I'm not entirely sure what to do with it either
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@redtie Anythign else?
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@redtie *nodnod* Like I said, not what I originally planned for him anyways.
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!vancouverbronies @redtie Dinner, maybe?
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@redtie He becomes Deus, yeah. I definitely didn't mean to make him sound quite so forced, but his second set of lines I tried to match the first for consistency
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@redtie That would be Doof. A reasonable critique; it did come out a lot more forceful that I originally intended. What else
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@redtie Now I have to ask you about how well I played with my voice. I don't think I did Jetstream well enough, and my Big Mac definitely could have been better. What about the rest?
