Jordan Cameron (tenmihara)'s status on Monday, 01-Aug-11 06:03:23 UTC
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@hoit21 Stolen Harmony comes first; I try to keep to one project at a time. Now then, as for your work allow me to offer this advice; the pacing is a bit too fast, meaning that the characters are jumping around form one place to another with little in depth description or transition. The technical aspects of the writing are fine, but my main issue is the relatively minimal amount of description you offer. It's difficult to get into a scene if you don't know what's going on around the characters. That said, I have just the thing to help you out. There's a writer's training ground over on Ponychan that I've found quite helpful in devloping my skills. Link in a sec
