Milo (milo)'s status on Friday, 03-Jun-11 00:46:21 UTC
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@nvrrmbr It was awesome, except I just felt a feeling of rush through the whole story, I mean it happened so fast, the way Chris met Isaac Clark and instantly followed him as if they had been friends forever. I just think you should have added in a event where they start getting closer before going on an adventure as soon as you wake up and jump into the action, I mean the story was action after action, I mean its not a bad thing but there should be a more flow to things, like a rising event, then a event where things start to calm down. I mean I only disliked that Gabriel started to attack every 5 minutes. It was a pretty good story it just that the should be more events in between stuff, I mean meeting someone for just a few days and then deciding to bear a child with a friend you just met, seems kind of off, like it needed a time for those two characters to bond a bit more before doing so. But Great job on it. Better then what I could try and do.
