MetalTao (metaltao)'s status on Thursday, 26-Jun-14 02:02:14 UTC

  1. MetalTao MetalTao

    @lunaloverchay Now, there are many words you could use to change "Then she walked up to me and ask my name i told her my name." Now "i told her my name." Could be changed to say something less redundant, for example! "Then she walked up to me and ask my name, I told her in kind. 'My name is Chay Vroman...'" ELICIT emotions from your words! I am surprised, you seem to learn fast

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