1. Derp. RDN is keeping me from typing my fanfiction. -.-

    Sunday, 27-May-12 21:23:06 UTC from web
    1. @soundblast Welcome to the club, I've been writing stuff since last june...

      Sunday, 27-May-12 21:23:49 UTC from web
      1. @sarramore lol, since sometime last year. started on one, cancelled that one. Started on a human vs zombie thing, still going with that, and now a Vinyl vs Octavia one. Need help on ch 3 with that one.

        Sunday, 27-May-12 21:25:42 UTC from web
        1. @soundblast I'll try read it sometime. *cancels own writing* I don't have anything planned, I can help you out with it on Tuesday.

          Sunday, 27-May-12 21:27:36 UTC from web
          1. @sarramore lol, you don't have to do that. I just need a way to skip putting in that first battle a second time. I'm fine with repeating dialogue, but entire scenes is a no.

            Sunday, 27-May-12 21:29:01 UTC from web
            1. @soundblast Use some sparse details, and a lot of ellipsis.

              Sunday, 27-May-12 21:30:57 UTC from web
              1. @sarramore eh, who what now? Lol, sorry, but you used a term that I'm not too familiar with. I'm also not good with sparse details, or detail in general. My fanfictions are mostly dialogue based.

                Sunday, 27-May-12 21:32:42 UTC from web
                1. @soundblast Ellipsis. Take this"The young mare looked into the eyes of the dashing stallion before her, her heart was racing her head was spinning and her whole body was tingling "I love you with all my heart, you make up all that I dream of" a tear slowly ticked down her face as the burden of a secret was lifted" Then take this "She looked into his eyes... "I love you... you make up all that I dream of." a tear ran down her face and she looked at peace" I shortened it the second time and used some elipsis "..."

                  Sunday, 27-May-12 21:45:18 UTC from web
                  1. @sarramore hmmm. I'm not usually good at that, but I'll give it a try. The battle scene is pretty short to begin with though.

                    Sunday, 27-May-12 21:51:11 UTC from web
      2. @sarramore here it is id like a critique if u could ....

        Sunday, 27-May-12 21:25:55 UTC from web
        1. @chibithepony On it.

          Sunday, 27-May-12 21:26:27 UTC from web