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  1. Dib Membrane Dib Membrane

    I think my story will work now! http://rainbowdash.net/url/819130

    Friday, 27-Feb-15 04:50:06 UTC from web
    1. MetalTao MetalTao

      @dibmembrane I have a complaint, the flow from powers to grandparents is a bit on the Wonky side, ideas need to flow from one to the other. You see, you mentioned two things in te first sentence, Explain one at a time, and, explain them chronologically.
      You went from, "I have powers!" And Then wen, "I live with my grandparents." And explained the grandparents lives witjout explaining what came first, the powers.

      Friday, 27-Feb-15 04:53:58 UTC from web
      1. Dib Membrane Dib Membrane

        @metaltao ok thanks! I will work on that

        Friday, 27-Feb-15 04:54:58 UTC from web
        1. MetalTao MetalTao

          @dibmembrane Yo did a good job with the font and the format! I love it! reminds me of a real diary! ^3^

          Friday, 27-Feb-15 04:55:28 UTC from web
        2. MetalTao MetalTao

          @dibmembrane ANd, that is something Authors don't employ as often these days! Thanks for your ambition!

          Friday, 27-Feb-15 04:55:48 UTC from web