Replies to knoxemerald, page 4
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@knoxemerald night
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@knoxemerald Good night!
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@knoxemerald if your wondering I didn't start all this Spitfire avatar changes....
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@knoxemerald I had to attend a funeral for my grandfather, who died two weeks ago. :l
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@knoxemerald Alright I guess. Just recovering from a pretty bad week. Doing some drawing at the moment.
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@knoxemerald Hay there! How's it going?
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@knoxemerald Oh yes~ <3
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@knoxemerald HI KNOX, YOU JUST CAME IN AT THE MOST AWKWARD TIME!!
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@knoxemerald Pretty quiet new years day, that's for sure. :p
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@knoxemerald Watching South Park, lookign at pony art, the usual
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@knoxemerald Bony time is best time
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@knoxemerald It's ALWAYS pony time.
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@knoxemerald It's always time for ponies! >:3
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@knoxemerald Night!
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@knoxemerald Goodnight! See you later! :3
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@knoxemerald G'night! Sleep well!
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@knoxemerald Thankie! ♥ and how are you?
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@knoxemerald Prolly not. I have paranoia issuess. Will do as soon as I get the chance though
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@knoxemerald I'll be sure to read the story through... currently, I read the first chapter half way through... I guess I could just tell you if there's anything else I spot next time I catch you around RDN.
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@knoxemerald sorry if my criticisms are going on a little to heavily, I try not to make it too harsh or too commanding, I just try to put what I think can help you.
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@knoxemerald and another thing I noticed, is that you may be using the word Twilight too often, when you could use other descriptors such as "the purple mare", something that doesn't explicitly state a subject's name, but rather alluding to it. Its not to say that you should never use Twilight's name, just a little bit of variance can take you a long way.
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@knoxemerald thanks, sorry if I seem a little long winded, I'm trying to practice a little imagery a bit for my own fan fic.
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@knoxemerald Happens to the best of us... the idea is good though, and it has good potential. Perhaps, and I don't mean to insist on an idea, but rather just suggest possible future events, that Twilight can't find her way out, or perhaps doesn't want to leave for some reason?
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@knoxemerald lolnope
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@knoxemerald Righty-o... and btw, I'm reading your fanfic, and it seems good. I have a suggestion to make though. Could you be as descriptive as you were with Twilight entering the spiritual plane in the other events that happen in the story, such as, instead of Twilight running to the library, say something more along the lines of "Twilight saw the side shops and colorful houses pass with a blur, as her legs were carrying her with full force, burdened only with a package that had been delivered to her by Ditzy, a package with the Royal seal of none other than Princess Celestia". Just a hint though
