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I want a general opinion on how you would feel if Fluttershy got trapped in a landslide, everypony thinks she's dead, but she really isn't, but neither you or the other characters wouldn't know that until several chapters afterwards? I was really hoping I could do something with the idea
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:01:30 UTC from web-
@the20percent Sounds like a good idea. When I get an idea like that, I try to see how much I could expand upon the idea before writing. What events could I include. Sometimes I doodle little bits on a small piece of paper to see how far I could go with that single idea.
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:03:30 UTC from web-
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Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:10:49 UTC from web -
@knoxemerald that encrypted message was for you... be warned, it contains a spoiler to an event that may occur in my fanfic.. sorry, fail encrytpion. what do you think?
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:11:52 UTC from web-
@the20percent Sorry, I'm not sure what to do with that. How about if you do make it, send it to me and I'll let you know what I think. Or you could just send me more ideas when you expand upon them.
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:15:44 UTC from web-
@knoxemerald the fanfic isn't going to be ready anytime soon, especially with school ripping me from all of my time...
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:17:50 UTC from web-
@the20percent Take your time. It's the best thing you can do.
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:19:09 UTC from web-
@knoxemerald Righty-o... and btw, I'm reading your fanfic, and it seems good. I have a suggestion to make though. Could you be as descriptive as you were with Twilight entering the spiritual plane in the other events that happen in the story, such as, instead of Twilight running to the library, say something more along the lines of "Twilight saw the side shops and colorful houses pass with a blur, as her legs were carrying her with full force, burdened only with a package that had been delivered to her by Ditzy, a package with the Royal seal of none other than Princess Celestia". Just a hint though
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:22:54 UTC from web-
@the20percent I'm trying to focus on that more. I know I can get a little lazy at times.
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:24:47 UTC from web-
@knoxemerald Happens to the best of us... the idea is good though, and it has good potential. Perhaps, and I don't mean to insist on an idea, but rather just suggest possible future events, that Twilight can't find her way out, or perhaps doesn't want to leave for some reason?
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:27:41 UTC from web-
@the20percent The fic is already complete. I like your ideas though.
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:28:38 UTC from web-
@knoxemerald thanks, sorry if I seem a little long winded, I'm trying to practice a little imagery a bit for my own fan fic.
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:31:00 UTC from web-
@the20percent That's the way to go. Think it out. Think about all the events that can transpire during the entire thing. How can you make them that more dramatic? more hopeful? That's what I try to do.
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:32:46 UTC from web-
@knoxemerald sorry if my criticisms are going on a little to heavily, I try not to make it too harsh or too commanding, I just try to put what I think can help you.
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:41:02 UTC from web-
@the20percent I appreciate it. It all helps in the long run. I appreciate any criticism I can get, so no worries there.
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:43:57 UTC from web-
@knoxemerald I'll be sure to read the story through... currently, I read the first chapter half way through... I guess I could just tell you if there's anything else I spot next time I catch you around RDN.
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:46:08 UTC from web-
@the20percent It's always appreciated and I hope you enjoy the story. Have a good night!
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:49:42 UTC from web
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@knoxemerald and another thing I noticed, is that you may be using the word Twilight too often, when you could use other descriptors such as "the purple mare", something that doesn't explicitly state a subject's name, but rather alluding to it. Its not to say that you should never use Twilight's name, just a little bit of variance can take you a long way.
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:35:57 UTC from web-
@the20percent I read up on that the other day. Strangely enough, I did that a lot in my other fics, but didn't do it in this one. I gotta work on that too.
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:38:55 UTC from web
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@the20percent Sounds hilarious. But seriously, I'm not sure how I'd feel because you've just told me you're planning on doing it.
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:04:09 UTC from StatusNet iPhone-
@yodelerty Sorry :/
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:04:52 UTC from web-
@the20percent http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7408817/1/Advice_From_The_Voice_Of_Servitude That is chapter 1 is you're interested. Any feedback is appreciated.
Friday, 23-Dec-11 07:08:52 UTC from web
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