Crusader 8 (princelypublictimeline)'s status on Sunday, 15-Apr-12 06:41:48 UTC

  1. @renovatedkitchen only flaw of CMC's opening up is that there'd literally be no foreshadowing of any effective value possible. They are also more like plot devices and less like supporting characters, because they [spoiler spoiler] and it moves things later, and then afterward they kind of fall out of the story. Again, it might make things easier to pick up and go but it won't properly set the tone. This ain't your happy-sunny MLP we talkin' here, so too much of that at the beginning might not mesh well. I consider this equally next to what you advise. I need to see if what you're suggesting still works with maintaining the first chapter's establishment of theme and tones, which is a very delicate endeavor, then I will do my best to incorporate your criticisms into my editing process.

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