Crusader 8 (princelypublictimeline)'s status on Sunday, 20-May-12 03:58:00 UTC

  1. Crusader 8 Crusader 8

    You got a case of run-on sentences, some grammar issues and spelling issues, which is the norm for first drafts. You should expand what you wrote into at least two or three pages, So that you can have more room to paint the scene/describe what's happening better. My last suggestion is to keep it in third person and not first person.

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